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    dots Submission Name: Intoxicate Medots
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    Author: poetic_tragedy
    ASL Info:    16/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39/55/30
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsIntoxicate Medots
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    Breathing the fumes
    Getting high off your scent
    It leads to our dooms
    Yet I dare the descent

    Lower and lower
    As I fall to the floor
    BANG, BANG, BANG!
    On the bathroom door.

    Everytime you come around
    I breathe you in
    I fall down
    Can't take it
    Can't fake it
    Don't break it.

    Intoxicated
    I can't breathe
    Believing your lies
    It's killing me.

    Lying on the ground
    In your eyes I'm fine
    I know what I need
    Yet I can't wait to be found.

    Everytime you come around
    I breathe you in
    I fall down
    Can't take it
    Can't fake it
    Don't break it.

    Automatic mutilation
    Throats burning as if by inhalation
    Sober me
    It's intoxicating.





    Submitted on 2007-01-05 21:22:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is deep. Keep writing
    ~**~ Dramaqueen ~**~
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Dramaqueen | [ Reply to This ]


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