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Submission Name:
Intoxicate Me
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Author:
poetic_tragedy
ASL Info:
16/f/USA
Elite Ratio:
2.89 - 39/55/30
Words:
126
Class/Type:
Lyrics/Love
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Intoxicate Me
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Breathing the fumes
Getting high off your scent
It leads to our dooms
Yet I dare the descent
Lower and lower
As I fall to the floor
BANG, BANG, BANG!
On the bathroom door.
Everytime you come around
I breathe you in
I fall down
Can't take it
Can't fake it
Don't break it.
Intoxicated
I can't breathe
Believing your lies
It's killing me.
Lying on the ground
In your eyes I'm fine
I know what I need
Yet I can't wait to be found.
Everytime you come around
I breathe you in
I fall down
Can't take it
Can't fake it
Don't break it.
Automatic mutilation
Throats burning as if by inhalation
Sober me
It's intoxicating.
Submitted on 2007-01-05 21:22:18
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This poem is deep. Keep writing
~**~ Dramaqueen ~**~
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