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Intoxicate Me


Author: poetic_tragedy
ASL Info:    16/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39 /55 /30
Words: 126
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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Intoxicate Me



Breathing the fumes
Getting high off your scent
It leads to our dooms
Yet I dare the descent

Lower and lower
As I fall to the floor
BANG, BANG, BANG!
On the bathroom door.

Everytime you come around
I breathe you in
I fall down
Can't take it
Can't fake it
Don't break it.

Intoxicated
I can't breathe
Believing your lies
It's killing me.

Lying on the ground
In your eyes I'm fine
I know what I need
Yet I can't wait to be found.

Everytime you come around
I breathe you in
I fall down
Can't take it
Can't fake it
Don't break it.

Automatic mutilation
Throats burning as if by inhalation
Sober me
It's intoxicating.





Submitted on 2007-01-05 21:22:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem is deep. Keep writing
~**~ Dramaqueen ~**~
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Dramaqueen | [ Reply to This ]


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