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The Diary of a Hypochondriac


Author: poetic_tragedy
ASL Info:    16/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39 /55 /30
Words: 160
Class/Type: Lyrics /The pain inside
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The Diary of a Hypochondriac



Hyperventilating
Am I going blind?
I can't see, yet I know you're behind.

10 times worse
By your everlasting kiss
Hooked to IV's
I can't take this shit!

Suffocating me, suffocating me
No one can save me now
My heart explodes as my eyes bleed
Standing up and falling back down.

I'm only a stranger to some
I choke as my arms go numb
Waiting for you to come through
But you're numb too.

I don't think I like you
I liked you better before I knew
What you do for a living
It doesn't concern me
But I don't trust you.

Suffocating me, suffocating me
No one can save me now
My heart explodes as my eyes bleed
Standing up and falling back down.

Falling, falling, falling
Standing up.

Suffocating me, suffocating me
No one can save me now
My heart explodes as my eyes blled
Standing up and falling back down.




Submitted on 2007-01-05 21:27:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is great.

my sister is a mild hypochondriac, so this made me laugh a little.

I like the repetition of

"Suffocating me, suffocating me
No one can save me now
My heart explodes as my eyes blled
Standing up and falling back down."

It brought the piece together. good write.
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]


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