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Putting it in words


Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Im never any good at saying any feelings i have or thoughs goin on in my head out loud. This just kinda flowed out as i wrote it heh.


Putting it in words



To put it in words,
my feelings for you,
is the hardest thing,
ive had to do,

there are no words,
to express,
how i long to feel,
your warm caress,

how my heart leaps,
each time you smile,
i know this wait,
will be worthwhile,

you make me laugh
when i cry,
and help me smile,
when i feel i could die,

i cherish every moment,
each second we spend,
my love for you,
will never, ever, end.




Submitted on 2007-01-06 08:02:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi Lou!
Another nice peom of yours. Its short and sweet & the words are very thoughtful. The rhyme scheme is good too. I think it could be better, though, if you made the lines a bit longer. Otherwise, I think this poem is really fine! Great Write! : )
| Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
  oooh! i like this! i can really relate to this poem and it was expressed perfectly!
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
  Another good write. Sorry I haven't been by lately, I haven't had much time on my hands. In any case, keep up the good work; I'm really too tired to go into a detailed psychoanalysis right now...

--crimson echo
| Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good. A short sweet poem. I like it.

Very well done.
Props to you.

Keep up the excellent writing!

peace.
-Kamerin
| Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]
  Well put together Lou. It is catchy, but it is also very deep in meaning and sentiment. I enjoyed reading this a lot.

I will catch up with the rest of your stuff real soon.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  write more like this. when u just let words flow, it's better than trying to write a poem. let the poem come to you.
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
  Seems like you've put it into words very well with this one, Lou! This is a marvelous little love poem, with good rhyme, meter, and a "catchy" ending that "says it all"!! Nice work!
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this one. its simple, yet it keeps focus on the topic of love.

nice write
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it its meaningfull nice pic.
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]


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