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    dots Submission Name: Putting it in wordsdots

    Author: elseibi
    ASL Info:    20/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228/180/38
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1241
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       Im never any good at saying any feelings i have or thoughs goin on in my head out loud. This just kinda flowed out as i wrote it heh.

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    dotsPutting it in wordsdots

    To put it in words,
    my feelings for you,
    is the hardest thing,
    ive had to do,

    there are no words,
    to express,
    how i long to feel,
    your warm caress,

    how my heart leaps,
    each time you smile,
    i know this wait,
    will be worthwhile,

    you make me laugh
    when i cry,
    and help me smile,
    when i feel i could die,

    i cherish every moment,
    each second we spend,
    my love for you,
    will never, ever, end.

    Submitted on 2007-01-06 08:02:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Lou!
    Another nice peom of yours. Its short and sweet & the words are very thoughtful. The rhyme scheme is good too. I think it could be better, though, if you made the lines a bit longer. Otherwise, I think this poem is really fine! Great Write! : )
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      oooh! i like this! i can really relate to this poem and it was expressed perfectly!
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      Another good write. Sorry I haven't been by lately, I haven't had much time on my hands. In any case, keep up the good work; I'm really too tired to go into a detailed psychoanalysis right now...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. A short sweet poem. I like it.

    Very well done.
    Props to you.

    Keep up the excellent writing!

    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]
      Well put together Lou. It is catchy, but it is also very deep in meaning and sentiment. I enjoyed reading this a lot.

    I will catch up with the rest of your stuff real soon.

    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      write more like this. when u just let words flow, it's better than trying to write a poem. let the poem come to you.
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      Seems like you've put it into words very well with this one, Lou! This is a marvelous little love poem, with good rhyme, meter, and a "catchy" ending that "says it all"!! Nice work!
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this one. its simple, yet it keeps focus on the topic of love.

    nice write
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it its meaningfull nice pic.
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]

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