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    dots Submission Name: the treedots
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    Author: thewantedwords
    ASL Info:    28 male sydney
    Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40/40/37
    Words: 360
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 769
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 542



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    dotsthe treedots
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    like a tree the body stands tall, with its branches the leaves shall fall, with its roots it gains its strenghs, but when connected makes it intense, but if no water it will shorely cry, and just like you it will shorely die.




    Submitted on 2007-01-06 08:59:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg i really wasnt sure if i would like this but wow thats all i gotta say is wow love it! lol <3
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good.

    only suggestion is a spell check: **surely
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an ok poem but I really think you should consider more spacing and spelling and capitilization.

    - Kathleen :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this but you might want to think about capitilization, and putting it into stanzas. it flows easier that way.
    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]


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