Description: Thank you my baby for all the inspiration and ideas.
Another one from the lips of my love to the print on the screen.
I'm not sure what kind of Metal-man she had in mind but this is what I came up with
Metal man? -------------------------------------------
Stood alone
Solitary, with an age of rust beaten
Into a brow of iron
Thoughts being unknown
To a being with no soul
Though he stands resolute
A duty to perform
To house natures young?
For that seems to be all that occupies
Though once, he did stand proud
Dulcet gleam of life portrayed
With a look of sincerity, in glassless eyes
And thoughts were unknown
To a being with no soul
Though still he stands resolute
If a memory was earned
Inside a skull cast in fire
Would he tell us of life in his day?
Of the summers of past lives
Of teachings of men
Or the suns rise and fall off the shore
But thoughts are unknown
To a being with no soul
Though still, he stands resolute
It's not often I get to say this, LocalFreak, but I can find nothing negative to critique about this piece other than a minor spelling mistake. You missed out the 'e' in resolute. But that is most probably just a typing error.
A wonderful use of language along with a brilliant theme. I hope all your work is this well done.
Submission Name: Metal man?
