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    dots Submission Name: Anatomydots

    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Pale brown face rests among slender hands,
    Dark chocolate eyes hidden under soft curls,
    Curls matted like twigs and leaves in a bird’s nest,
    And soft long eyelashes erupting from eyelids.

    Lean – sea salty – neck stands tall from shoulders up,
    Narrow shoulders break out like tree’s branches,
    Small chest barely coming to the age of manhood,
    Heaves and intakes rapid breaths of anxiety.

    Lungs breathe in and out as the heart pumps blood
    To his spider web veins – that entangle – themselves,
    In the interior of the solid brown trunk, stretching
    Abundantly, all over his ample boyhood body

    From the protective ribcage of many bones, that cradles
    The vital instrument of life, to the delicate Adam’s apple
    Vibrating quietly to the beat of the rhythmic pulse,
    And finally, reaching the soft thin lips parted half way

    Such thin lips that let out puffs of carbon dioxide; and
    Pecks to the neighboring skin of tentative timid kisses
    And then his mouth slowly spells out, in a slow silhouette
    His lover’s name, the sound almost magical in her ear

    January 2007

    Submitted on 2007-01-06 11:10:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the discripition. it kinda gives me chils. i love how you use metaphors to explain the human body. i really like this
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]

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