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    dots Submission Name: Stained Glass Behind Barsdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsStained Glass Behind Barsdots
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    A stained glass window protected by bars
    Conscripted me to translate its message
    It is content to be as it was made
    It has no need of mobility or nobility

    However, it resents the imposed protection
    And separation represented by the steel
    It wants to be seen and take its chances
    Against an odd rock tossed its way

    I don't know why I heard or understood
    Perhaps it spoke to my sensuality
    That is imprisoned by morality
    Or to my spirit trapped in a cell of mortality




    Submitted on 2007-01-06 11:34:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its all about unveiling the beauty hidden beneath harsh exteriors...
    ogres have layers... like onions... not parfait

    but no...
    i have always been attracted to stained glass windows ever since i heard one of the reasons they put them on old churches...
    i heard it was because the bible was only read by the priests and the poor people hardly even got the opportunity to hear it and the stained glass windows that told the stories from the bible served as a reminder for all...
    or something to that effect.
    and i thought that was beautiful.
    it seems like a transparent expression of faith and whatever religion/spirit we choose to believe in/live for i think our expressions of faith need to be transparent for them to be taken seriously... you know...?


    you make some beautiful connections here...
    sensuality/morality
    spirituality/mortality
    simply stunning.
    to some, depending what they choose to believe, these ideas seem polar opposite and there always seems to be some kind of comflict there... perhaps that is where the transparent expression of faith is needed... to un-demonise these ideas... make them easier to reconcile to the "power" they believe in...

    yeah...
    this is really beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I love that the speaker's interpretation doesn't come from a description of the window, but like it speaks some other way. The last three lines are kind of hard to get off the tongue, but i think that's effective when the reader sees it and starts to really focus on those words. I thought it was very imaginative. cheers
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by ariadne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is deep! I read it twice, to fully understand this, and it sunk in so well, and I loved it. In the trying to preserve it, maybe the thing does not want to be preserved. Maybe it wants to shine in it's own light, and if it goes, then it goes, but it definitely wants to live. I can see the connection between that in the spirit. A person who wants to live, and not be protect, or thought of as too worthy to go out, and shine in the world, or experience, but the person doesn't see themselves as to worthy for the hardness of life, and wants to live it. I love this, I think it's a really great analogy. As always, you write amazingly, and never fail to put me in awe, or a feeling or retrospection. Thank you for keeping my thoughts away from my upset, even if only for a while.
    You are loved always,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      This write I find to be very deep Chrystine
    To me I believe you are referring perhaps to someone who is in solitary confinement and the walls around them are the only things that they can make friends with
    You know what I just thought of writing this that is very interesting
    Some metal creates a mirror effect
    Can you imagine the insanity a person goes through in solitary only stareing at themselves for friendship
    That is why I find this write so deep Chrystine
    Excellent Job!!!
    Im leaving for good Monday afternoon for New Jersey
    Its time to move back home
    You take care of yourself Chrystine and keep the California Poetry scene Alive
    I know you will!!!!
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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