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    dots Submission Name: Lurking Behind the Doordots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsLurking Behind the Doordots
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    There's a place so dark and damp
    where, for weeks, no one did tramp.
    Without light and always cold,
    it's a place that's known for mold.

    I did fear to look inside
    at what must be putrefied.
    Leaves of lettuce, slimy yuck,
    dark green bread would be my luck!
    There'd be oranges, shriveled, hard,
    in the fruit bin boulevard;
    and the stuff that once was meat
    now'd resemble brown concrete.

    Hold my breath and open wide;
    take a look and shallow pride.
    What's the fuzzy, yellow pile?
    Mashed potatoes looking vile!
    There's an odor I detect
    that does reek of sheer neglect.
    It's the rotting tuna fish
    on a little, plastic dish.

    There's a price to pay for fun,
    and I face what must be done.
    Love of travel must be how
    I forgot the "frig"...'til now!





    Submitted on 2007-01-06 11:36:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha! I must say, this is rather cute, and has a somewhat innocent appeal to it. The rhyme scheme is simple, as is the rhythm, but in this the simplicity adds to the anxiety upon going to the fridge. It sounds like a college dorm gone wrong.
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by racconeyes | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL
    brilliant. you had me going 'urgh!!' a few times. haha
    thanks for the chuckle!
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, heh! Reminds me of the "frig" when I was young, unmarried, and shared an apartment with a couple of batchelor roommates!!! Cute write, Sharon!
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      verry funny, i liked it, the most poems i have read on here are about people being neglected,and you are talking about neglecting food and fridge, nice and different. like i said before you have a good sense of humour, and you know how to bring it on to paper.keep it up.ps, i just posted a one night stand, if you have time can you tell me what you think about it. cheers gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty funny, taking something so common about food and giving its own kind of twist. I don't see really nothing about this piece. well hope to hear from ya .

    Max
    Aka
    Lil' Mix
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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