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    dots Submission Name: Hidden yearning for a Pagedots

    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHidden yearning for a Pagedots

    I stand by
    and watch him grow.
    Unscathed in the shadows.
    Finding safer arms
    So I can live on.

    I've held my secret.
    Held it still.
    Close to my heart.

    But at arm's lenght from me.

    Inside my coat pocket,
    it becomes mine and silent.
    Then, my silence becomes him
    And I caress it.

    My hidden yearning for this Page
    becomes painfully palpable.

    While I wait noiseless and sage
    I put on a brave face
    and join the parade.

    Always stroking my secret
    and keeping him close.

    I live on and no one knows.

    Submitted on 2007-01-06 15:23:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was interesting. What I really liked is how time passes. And I totally understand what you're saying. Ive got the same secret, but sometimes you need to expose it. Hasn't yet worked out for me, but it might for you. I really liked the 4th verse. Great metaphor!
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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