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Peaceful threat of happiness


Author: LadyMerlina
ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58
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Peaceful threat of happiness


Silence.
At the end of a thread.
Fallen fingers, stopped hands
Like a yearning unfulfilled.
Like a hunger unfed.

I think of you

And time fades on,
fades fast
and fades away.

Still,
THIS PEACEFUL THREAT OF HAPPINESS
HANGS ABOVE ME AND WILL NOT BE SWAYED.

I think of you

I know I always want most
what I can't have.
BUT I REFUSE TO THORW AWAY HAPPINESS WITH BOTH HANDS.

I think of you.

So, I love another man.




Submitted on 2007-01-06 15:54:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  What??????

Such a dedication and then a betrayal of what you would silently declare you love for? Sheez, I'm broken!

It hurts you in some small part to love a love that knows not of your love or loves you not. But it hurts even more to know that you betrayed such a purity held for "a love" by loving another.

"The demons of one life pass to another if not confronted and conquered" - Is love a demon[?]

Not too sure if the capitalised lines make for any more impetus of impact. I think not having reformatted them in my mind. I think if you could tighten it up the solidity of the piece would be better for it.

A nice expressive piece.
| Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]


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