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    dots Submission Name: Live My Lifedots
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    Author: Crash
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 1374/490/63
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is one of my older writes, rewritten, rehashed, and mostly reworked. Recording available on MySpace soon.


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    dotsLive My Lifedots
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    Live My Life

    If I read a book and miss a page
    Will she sleep all night half awake
    Wondering if a white horse came
    Carried her far, far away

    If I miss a kiss before you leave
    Will you still be coming home to me
    Or will I overlook that you're gone
    Trade perfect sunsets for rainy dawns

    I want to live life keeping in mind
    All the little things we leave behind
    I want to live having peace of mind
    At the end of the day you're still mine

    Bedtime stories, one thirsty kid
    You're asleep, missed another kiss
    I lay down and set the world aside
    Close my eyes have a word with the sky

    If I read a book and miss a page
    While we're sleeping will You stay awake
    Watch over us and know that I tried
    To live my life keeping You in mind

    I want to live life keeping in mind
    All the little things we leave behind
    I want to live having peace of mind
    At the end of the day you're still mine

    2006 Ron Morgan




    Submitted on 2007-01-06 16:06:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      o.o.....
    humana humana..
    i need to add to my vocabulary if im to continue reading your work....
    superb
    magnificent
    great
    very nice
    awesome
    terrific
    some pig
    ...O.o
    i mean...............
    what the duece....
    o.O
    neway i send you cyber hugs for this one
    much love,
    grace.
    | Posted on 2007-07-28 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      hello Mate.
    to me this reads like the words of a song and, with my keen eye for detail i notice that you have majored on lyrics these past months...
    and it seems to me there are more than 2 here: a guardian angel maybe plus a pair of earth-bound souls.
    whichever way, it has a nursery rhyme lilt to it and it easy to manage yes, it would be a lullaby of sorts would it not.
    and this for me absolves you of any charge of 'repetition' or 'dumbing down' because it is not necessarily for the adults and if it is, then it sends us neatly back a few years.
    so it is fine.
    as i trust you are too?
    take it easy Ron.
    k
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      just wanted to let you know I'm not ignoring your posts. Is this one of the ones I have downloaded? I'll check at home. I like this so far but would like to see a bridge device used toward the end...of course I take it at a fairly fast tempo...but that's me.
    I can't wait to hear some of these new ones. Been generally run off my ass at work, so my fun time on the internet has deminished to almost nothing. I'll catch you soon.
    jan
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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