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Author: Lynda
ASL Info:    26/F
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You once told me of your passion for Rome,
It was five years ago, and also the day I fell in love.
From that day forward, our friendship grew.
We've been through so much, seen the good and the bad.
Somehow in that time my love grew deeper.
I never told you.
Scenarios played out in my head.
In my dreams, instead of parting ways at the end of the night, you would kiss me.
They were only dreams though.
After five years of lies, I couldn't tell you the truth.
How could I possibly say that I love you after this long?
I can't believe you don't see it in my face every time you smile. Your happiness fills my soul.
Then, last night, after all these years, my dreams came true.
At the end of the night, you kissed me. My heart beat through my chest.
Somehow I thought that the alcohol couldn't have been the reason.
Somehow I believed it was more than a midnight drunken mishap.
This morning, when you said you didn't remember most of the night, my heart crumbled.
I'll go back once again to pretending to be friends.

Submitted on 2007-01-06 17:01:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A very, very poignant and bittersweet piece that reads more like a prose poem than actual poetry ... heartfelt and very deftly done, indeed! bravo ... bravo ... michael
| Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Mmph. This poem broke my heart. I'm sorry that had to happen to you. Unrequited loves are never fun. Some day you should tell him; that's if you have nothing to lose.

I really enjoy the beginning section about Rome. It just shows all the little things that people do that can make you fall in love with them.

Nice work.
| Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
  ouch! this sounds painful. to have finally got what you yearned for, only to have it snatched right back from you.
is this a true account? if so, i'm sorry.
wonderful write, though. i felt it all. from the yearning, to the elation, then the heartbreak.
great job.
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  This really good i like the end better then the begging like this it would sound better if you switched a coulble of wrods around.

"You once told me of your passion for Rome,
It was five years ago, and as the world as i new it was about to change because, that day I fell in love.
From that day forward, our friendship grew."

You should say why u started fall in love was it his charm,looks,the way he look at u or the way gave u a hug or something then it was bring out this piece and would make end so much better, like i said the ending is very good, this has alot of portential. well hope to hear from you and keep writing.

Lil' Mix
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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