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Death Wish

Author: mrmundane
ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47 /96 /78
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Death Wish

living in the void
i attempt to litter oneself with the prospect of matter
leaves me under a falling anvil
inner chatter drives me mad altogether

collectively the counterfeit smiles cuss my cushions
made by the woman i love too deep
far too deep
so into an unfamiliar darkness i am sucked

unwanted yet again
only with a taste for meat
still unsatisfied
i weep and grow weak

of all the things i have to offer
nothing is ever fucking good enough
cleaned like a fish forever
somehow someone grabbed something i didn't know they were after...

after all the changes i've undertook
and every emotion in me shook
there is little left to keep me from disappearing

Submitted on 2007-01-06 19:56:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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