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    dots Submission Name: Believedots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1011
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    Bytes: 1168



    Description:
       this is a poem dedicated to a friend.


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    dotsBelievedots
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    I wonder what you see,
    when you look me in the eye,
    do you see something special,
    or just another guy?

    Am I holding onto a dream,
    that will never come true,
    is it hopeless to hold onto,
    the idea of me and you?

    Is it a waste of time,
    to chase you day in and day out,
    is it a waste of time,
    trying to figure you out?

    Are you trying to test me,
    to see how long it will take,
    before I give up on you,
    and turn around and walk away?

    Are you trying to test me,
    to see if I'll be there,
    to see how much I want this,
    how much I really care?

    Are you afraid I'm going to treat you,
    like every other guy,
    getting what I want,
    then telling you goodbye?

    Cause I promise I'm not like that,
    and I never will be,
    but before you can believe that,
    you have to believe in me.

    Decisions have to be made,
    and they're all in your hands,
    it's totally up to you,
    whether or not I get a chance.




    Submitted on 2007-01-06 21:51:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good work, dude.
    you got me again.
    i looove how you can use that rhyme and people use them every single day and they usually turn out like crap
    and of course, billy had to make it work.
    it's like you really are writing a letter and that's what i like about it because it's in poetry form.
    alot of the lines are in a poem i wrote a loooong time ago about---that one kid.

    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like you've got one of us doubtful girls on your hands! This is a great poem, kind of leaves you with a hold-on-and-wait feeling, like everything hangs on her decision.

    Nice job. :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
      Great! I have never read something like this from a guy... Seeing a relationship from a man's eyes... What he's thinking. Of course they all don't, but its nice to know that someone does! Great job spilling your heart out there, I love it.

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good, the flow was there start to begging, great use of words, the only thing is i think maybe explain what she look like or why u think this about her other than that it great. If you really like this girl go ahead ask her these question or something or show her u really care, suprise wit something flowers or somtin u know but hey not my busness
    . well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work.

    Max
    Aka
    Lil' Mix
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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