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    dots Submission Name: Rest In Peacedots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1004
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    Bytes: 1531



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    dotsRest In Peacedots
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    The Town Where We Reside, We Just Be-High
    Its Mellow But Its Like The Metro With No Free-Rides
    We Got The Fake Fictitious Fraudulent Drug Dealers
    The Five O, Fuq With These Guys So, Cuz They Love Squealers
    We Got The Queer Crooks, Cops Lookin For A Rat They Just Got To Look In The Year Books
    When The Deal Went Down, They Were Always Around, Claimin They Had The Clear Look
    Fuck The Bitches And Snitches, Without Scheming For Some Reason They Were Rich
    They Caused The ‘Shake’downs, Like The Needle To Make A Fiends Leg Twitch

    As Real Dudes Got Swept Out, They Rode The Broom Like Witches
    Theres No Space To Sell Or Deal, Barely Enough Room For Midgets
    In The Dark Of Night, They Had No Hearts In Like,
    They Were To Pussy To Even Try An Spark A Fight
    They Just Wait For The Sun To Rise And Narc In Light
    Are They Doomed This Fate, Or Is Their A Cure?
    Ill Put Them All In A Tomb With Hate, That’s For Sure

    Ill Show Them The Tru Meaning Of Torture, Feed Them With A Mortar
    Blaze Them With The Heat Of The Sun But Warmer, Lets Skip The Coroner
    Vest Broken, His Chest Open, To Mail His Heart To His Mom In A Closed Basket
    Its Gonna Be A Closed Casket, Spread Jelly On The Corpse For The Gross Maggots

    So With His Flesh To Reek, Getting Fucked In The Ass By The Devil, I Hope He Rests In Peace




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      This was very well writtn snitches end up in ditches wit stiches cause they be [censored]es...but yea this was really good the only thing at the end

    "Vest Broken, His Chest Open, To Mail His Heart To His Mom In A Closed Basket
    Its Gonna Be A Closed Casket, Spread Jelly On The Corpse For The Gross Maggots

    So With His Flesh To Reek, Getting [censored]ed In The Ass By The Devil, I Hope He Rests In Peace"


    u seem to force it n it kinda thows off flow off the rhyme sceme.... but other than dat it was good...

    well hope to hear from ya n keep up the good work


    Max
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    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      Love this. I love your rhyming scheme, very well done. I couldn't have pulled it off, I'm short with lines lol. Anyways, great job again, original, sharp, and great points made.

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, havnt been on this site in months, and ive missed reading ur work, and wot a piece to come back to lol, it stands out, and good points made, people can relate to this too, thanx for sharin,
    kyrenia x x x
    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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