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Author: Max R.
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Words: 144
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I’m taking the pills
I know it’s too late
Too late to be sorry
Too late to make right

I made them all suffer
I made them all cry
They just wanted love
I know they meant well

He was my life
He was my strength
It wasn’t made to last
He didn’t love me anymore

I’m not sad because of him
I’m not sad because he’s gone
I’m not dying for them
I’m dying for me

The pills are all gone now
The letter has been written
I just wanted to be happy
I just wanted my family back

They didn’t care enough to try
They didn’t care to love
They fought and shunned
They didn’t notice what they were doing

I listened to them all
I tried to deal
I’m falling now
Falling into blue

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