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    dots Submission Name: Fallingdots
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    Author: Max R.
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33/29/17
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFallingdots
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    Iím taking the pills
    I know itís too late
    Too late to be sorry
    Too late to make right

    I made them all suffer
    I made them all cry
    They just wanted love
    I know they meant well

    He was my life
    He was my strength
    It wasnít made to last
    He didnít love me anymore

    Iím not sad because of him
    Iím not sad because heís gone
    Iím not dying for them
    Iím dying for me

    The pills are all gone now
    The letter has been written
    I just wanted to be happy
    I just wanted my family back

    They didnít care enough to try
    They didnít care to love
    They fought and shunned
    They didnít notice what they were doing

    I listened to them all
    I tried to deal
    Iím falling now
    Falling into blue




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