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    dots Submission Name: no shackles for medots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 754
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       havnt written in a while, im jst playin round with words in this one, its the begging of new song, only shady first v. so let me know wot cha think, ta
    kyrenia x


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    feels like im running around in circles/ trying to find the force to guide me,/ cos since i met you, nothing else has enlightened me./ feel like the sand in an hourglass/ i tricle slowly in light loads,/ i dont know which direction to take, there are too many roads./ i dont want to lose you/ but i cant keep u either,/ your just too much to handle, others tell you to leave her./ i have the control,/ but i pass it straight to you/ do i let u lead me, or do i find someone new./ never been the girl to ride the pace/ i do what i choose,/ cant call me a house cat, i will only get loose./ so to hold me down would never be easy,/ im a free spirit/ no shackles on me, sky's the limit.





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      Wow. For a song, this would be perfect. I wish i could hear you sing it! When i read this, i thought about my relationships....and i think that a lot of people will be able to relate...which is in essence on of the goals of poetry. thanks for submitting this! maybe i'll hear someone sing it one day!
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Morticus | [ Reply to This ]


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