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    dots Submission Name: A THOUSAND WORLDSdots
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    Author: bigrig0625
    ASL Info:    34 M Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 40/73/19
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 608



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       This poem means something to me but may not mean the same to you. So read it if you like and maybe it will paint a picture of something going on in your own life. What could it mean to you?


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    dotsA THOUSAND WORLDSdots
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    A thousand worlds going thru my mind
    Abusive thoughts like tangled twine

    Anger unspoken but whispered unclear
    Like screaming voices you just can't hear

    Enter my dreams with problems unsolved
    Yet plead me not to get involved

    A twisted mind with blue eyes cold
    A burning soul with stories untold

    A fist of fury with knuckles of white
    Express to the world the ongoing fight

    Remember the days and warm of the sun
    Proud to be calm with evil undone



    ~bigrig0625~




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      To me it means holding my anger in and making myself look calm on the outside.


    "Remember the days and warm of the sun
    Proud to be calm with evil undone"

    awsome lines...
    | Posted on 2007-01-09 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      you've asked 'what could it mean to you?'
    well, this sounds to me like the inside of my head at the moment ~

    'Anger unspoken but whispered unclear
    Like screaming voices you just can't hear'
    a relationship gone bad.

    and this ~
    'Remember the days and warm of the sun
    Proud to be calm with evil undone'
    i remember what it used to be like.
    i liked this because i can relate to certain parts of it.
    this could mean lots of things to different people. will be interesting to see how others will relate to it.
    this piece feels very angry and sad.
    another nice piece from you.
    keep 'em coming.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-09 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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