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    dots Submission Name: The Darknessdots
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    Author: EmeRalDEyeZ5491
    ASL Info:    16.female.Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 130/137/105
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 373
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This isnt a scary poem. Its describing a void.


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    dotsThe Darknessdots
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    The darkness takes over
    Soothing and calm
    It contenplates my brain
    Without any take

    It gently whispers
    Words of encouragement
    As my sanity is erased
    From my brains crowded slate

    The whispers grow louder
    As the darkness spins faster
    I feel a warmth spread
    From my brain to my fingertips

    The darkness is safe
    It protects me from the world
    As it holds me in
    From the universe's cruel truth

    You may think the darkness is scary
    But to me it is home
    A blank place
    Where i can unload my thoughts

    The darkness takes over
    On a cloudy day
    I sit on my porch
    And allow the darkness to take me away




    Submitted on 2007-01-08 17:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A finely compose piece ... some thought was certainly put into the poem before hand ... always a great idea, though seldom done ... some good poetic language and a fine cadence as well ... over all good effect ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... Michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-09 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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