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    dots Submission Name: Here's To Life, Ignorace, And Deathdots
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    Author: screamALEX
    ASL Info:    19/M/PA
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 40/93/49
    Words: 321
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHere's To Life, Ignorace, And Deathdots
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    Let us define “unnatural”. Hospitals are unnatural,
    medicines, cell phones, computers, and yes ladies
    and gentlemen even breast augmentations.
    Humans have failed to be “natural” since the
    beginning of the Stone Age, since the
    invention of the wheel and the discovery of fire.
    “Natural” does not provide a means for survival,
    and in a society where even grass is engineered
    to grow extremely slow, who the fuck are
    you to tell me what is natural and unnatural?


    Oh no, not that!
    Not stem cell therapy, no siree.
    Killing cells is a heinous act.
    They say it’s best left to abominations in lab coats with microscopes,
    like an ax murderer with his daunting ax.
    We pray to God for miracles to appear,
    miracles we pushed away out of fear.
    Left hoping for the day diseases will simply disappear.

    So riddle me this Mr. Bush,
    Taking husbands from wives,
    and fathers from children’s lives,
    are your God given rights.
    But ridding this boy’s cancer is not worth the fight,
    not worth your time.
    No,
    I understand…
    with so much money to be drilled from the ground
    It’s no wonder you have such a tight grip on that glorious crown.

    I’ll let you all in on some “hush talk”.
    There were no Weapons of Mass Destruction.
    A nation razed under false pretenses,
    a monster hiding behind tyrannical conviction.
    Yet we all underhandedly support these “needed” sacrifices,
    Because we’d all kill for lower gas prices.
    I don’t know about you,
    but I sure as hell do.

    The world is your cradle and your trap.
    So let me be the first to give into the greed,
    and corporate trash.
    For if we can’t heal, then let us destroy.
    Call me a cynic, call me a fool,
    but let me let you in on a secret,
    cynics simply tell the truth.




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      "So let me be the first to give into the greed,
    and corporate trash.
    For if we can’t heal, then let us destroy."


    yeah.

    what you said.


    and then some...
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      There is so much of power, so much of conviction in this poem, it is hard to not applaud you on this really strong poem. I couldn't help but just read until the very ending of the sentence. Your very last sentence tells indeed the truth. I'm an cynic sometimes and i can tell you for sure, whenever i feel like that, i can see the truth more clearly. All the rosy clouds that are in front of my eyes when i am happy disappear and then i am able to see what is real in this world.

    I totally laughed with killing people for gas prices because it is totally true.

    You made some excellent points that were very motivating for me and i really can't tell you that there is anything wrong in this write because there isn't. This write has a lot of emotions in it and although the balance of a structured poem may be missing in some points, all i can tell you is "What the heck. i still loved it".
    Take care.....

    Irina
    | Posted on 2007-01-09 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      cynics simply tell the truth...

    well im thinking that others tell the truth but perhaps its the cynics who tell it like it is... blunt and outright without flowers and ideas of sunshine and happily ever afters... i guess i mean the truth without pretence...

    anyways... i decided i ought read your stuff coz some ppl i really admire always seem to be commenting on your stuff...
    i have to say i have always been a fan of political ranting through poetry... even when i dont know the politics of the country thats the rant is at lol
    now... everyone world over knows of american politics... it could be safe to say i know more about american politics than i do my own lol... when i was travelling both through europe and the US all i heard was US politics... we debated them in prague... defended them in budapest and i just kinda bounced around the states hanging out with all kindsa bush lovers/haters... it was an interesting ride for sure...

    so you make some valid points in here...
    hinting at the uselessness of wars and killing and how perhaps bush is taking as good a care of his countrymen as he is in those places that wars have been declared though in different ways of course... in the US theres more discreet forms of neglect i guess...

    poetically i think you could prolly approach it somewhat differently... right now it sounds like an out of control rant which is all good and fine but the idea of a controlled rant (which doesnt sound as spontaneous i know) could have more shock value somehow...

    anyways yeah...
    good luck with lower petrol prices and all...

    killing in the name of
    | Posted on 2007-01-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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