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    dots Submission Name: Love is Helldots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
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    dotsLove is Helldots
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    Love is war,
    war is Hell.
    Hated darkness,
    a prison cell.
    We are trapped
    within our hearts.
    Our minds bombarded
    from the start.
    Emotions rise
    to kill our souls.
    Our destruction
    is their goal.
    Now we lie,
    empty shells.
    Without a doubt,
    Love is Hell.




    Submitted on 2007-01-09 08:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man I am ready to pounce you and just discuss this tibdit with you...let's dissect this shall we?

    "Love is war,
    war is Hell.
    Hated darkness,
    a prison cell"

    Love is a war, sometimes you fight it against yourself and sometimes against others.
    War is hell, many killed and the souls of the damned remain on this battlefield to haunt you and blame you for their deaths?

    Hated darkness, a prison cell, trapped within the darkness, it holds you, immobilizes you with your fear....

    I think that was the best stanza, it had the most impact as a beginning.

    Overall: I liked this attempt, love is a hell of some sorts, love is heaven at times...it depends on if we're strong enough to fight for it...nice job though.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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