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    dots Submission Name: Devil's Toydots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDevil's Toydots
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    The ground shakes,
    and lava flows.
    This evil world
    has come to a close.
    The sun is gone,
    the sky is dark.
    Humans are gone,
    they've left no mark.
    The water is gone,
    Death's run wild.
    This place would scare
    the Devil's child.
    This nest of evil
    is full of sin.
    Good has been thrown
    into the lions den.
    Hope has been crushed,
    love is destroyed.
    Our world is now
    the Devil's toy.




    Submitted on 2007-01-09 08:31:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      cool it was good. went to gether well and i liked it
    | Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      Good finish!
    | Posted on 2007-01-10 00:00:00 | by Elena | [ Reply to This ]
      it definitely is, guess it was meant to be
    good write though.
    | Posted on 2007-01-10 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good i enjoyed the last two lines.
    | Posted on 2007-01-09 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]


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