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    dots Submission Name: A Fool's Dramadots

    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsA Fool's Dramadots

    How hard it is to understand you.
    Your words dance and twirl,
    like leaves before an autumn breeze.

    I chase after them,
    scooping up huge armfuls,
    but they slip away,
    tossed eternally upon the wind.

    I continue my useless pursuit,
    desperate to touch them,
    to smell them,
    to taste all their brilliant colors.

    It is a drama of folly,
    pursued to the point of pointlessness,
    and like a fool I follow.

    Submitted on 2004-01-30 17:51:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a beautiful piece! I love every word and line and the way you have intertwined them.
    I have been in this situation and you have described it perfectly capturing all the feelings.
    This is a fav for me! thank you

    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Lisa-Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this. My favorite line is "I continue my useless pursuit, desperate to touch them, to smell them, to taste all their brilliant colors." It gives a really clear image, keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by jess_mac | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, i liked this piece, you have a good imagination, especialy for writting, i have played toe fool too many times so i know what it feels like,
    keep em cummin
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... i like this a lot... the images are very real and this seems heartfelt but self-realizing... nice.
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful wrote. You've got amazing talent. I understand the feeling perfectly. Trying to understand someone, recognizing the beauty of their words,and feelingidiotic for not quite getting it... Another winner.
    | Posted on 2004-02-23 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      Great metaphor (or simile? I'm never able to keep those two straight). I really dig this one Scrib. I think everyone has been in this situation at least once.
    | Posted on 2004-02-01 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      nice comparision! thats what i got too... leaves being as fraile as a person.. nice write.. keep em coming
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhh, I really like this piece.The frustration and futility rin out clearly, but you have to follow your heart. Really nice, Thanks, silver
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome you're great man i never read some of these before and i love them you are genius and i'm not just saying that i really love these the senses in this one is great and then at the end which the greatest folly of all is pursuing the life of a writer
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]

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