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    dots Submission Name: hurt...dots
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    Author: Infected Mind
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/18/25
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotshurt...dots
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    Hurt broken, this heart that i shelter, away from any dangers far too fragile to just trust anyone spoken, words that seem so futile, shreds of hope and evidence spewing forth in decadence,hatred for what was done rage, rises into my spine, spreads and infects my mind, something breaks hold and i lose control! OPEN, RIPPED, AND ITS TORN TO SHREDS FLESH SEPERATES AS THE STEEL EMBEDS THE CLOUDS ROLL BY AS THE SKIES TURN BLACK IN CONSTANT TERROR, DONT KNOW WHERE THE FUCK YOUR AT! you did this... its all your fault... YOU WILL GET THIS! THERE IS NO HALT! feel your pulse as it starts racing, stop and look around... not much time its death your tasting, your body hits the ground.




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