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    dots Submission Name: Falling updots
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    Author: Infected Mind
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/18/25
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFalling updots
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    Falling Up inside out and upside down, fall into the sky and fly into the ground, put me down to ever slightly lift yourself echos bouncing endlessly, into the dead space melt choruses of proclaimed glories, promises but only stories fall back down and wait for the sound, hold your breath until it pounds stare blanky into the night,waiting for the first beam of light, lost cause no way to rebuild, dead feelings, hopeless to feel drift on forward and just keep floating, clear skies onward lets keep hoping, as we focus with our eyes, and start to fall into the sky.




    Submitted on 2007-01-10 20:35:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like and hear this, for me it comes from the right place, and arrives with the right emotion.
    good piece.
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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