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    dots Submission Name: Stale.dots
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    Author: fabulousAMY
    ASL Info:    21/Female/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 159/159/61
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 187
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    dotsStale.dots
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    You are stale smoke.

    You just sit in my lungs and make it hard for me to breath.

    No high, no artificial euphoria, no automatic relaxation.

    Sometimes you make me choke, you make my eyes tear,

    But mostly, you do nothing.

    I hope she's the right kind of stimulant for you.

    Because I guess she's stronger than I am.

    She spins you around faster than I could, she makes you so love stoned.

    You're caught in my throat now,

    I'm coughing, I'm hacking, I'm crying.

    You're no good anymore.

    You're no good anymore.




    Submitted on 2007-01-10 21:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love this...the drug/love comparrison was done very well, i love the line "She makes you so love stoned"...very well done.

    AL
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      very matter of fact, but very effective ... fine poem, indeed ... (is there in error in line 8?) bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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