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    dots Submission Name: Betrayed Medots
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    Author: TwistedMinded
    ASL Info:    23/m/San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 82/109/32
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       PLease make sure you check out "Lost" is the sequal for this poem and look out for couple more episodes
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    dotsBetrayed Medots
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    Man I listen to you and followed your word,
    I stayed loyal and carried your sword,
    I preached your name, and you betrayed me,
    You took her away,
    You let the devil give her cancer,
    And thatís how you pay me back,
    I thought you were the healing master,
    What the fuck is that,
    She was good to you, couldnít' you fix it?
    Why do good people die first? Jesus
    Man I got to say,
    You got your shit all twisted.




    Submitted on 2007-01-10 23:32:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dude this is fun. I like it. Good job, easy and fun enough to relate with a general audience.

    Kudos. (:
    | Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it... I can relate in so many ways... It's filled with the sad emotions of loss and betrayal both of which have been exprienced. Good wright
    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very powerful I'm not going to sit here and tell you why Jesus or God took your friend away, I know my boyfriend feels this way when he thinks about his Mum passing away. You are entitled to believe what you want to believe, but anyway moving along, I thought this was great, it captured the feeling of losing somebody close to you, I have never experienced it, but I think this was very well written

    Tink
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice!... I can relate to this.. in several ways. Nicely written...

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. speechless. very intense. good writng.
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      i can see what u mean by the betrayl part. sometimes i wonder if he's really there. very sad piece, i can see the vented anger as i read this. some people don't like the swearing, but i don't mind because it shows how angry u actually are. very good job, and u have my condolences
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Midnight Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      this is such a sad piece... i can feel your hurt, but i dont think the swearing fits... idk why. i dont think god betrays, sometimes things happen and i can't explain it. im so sorry that this happened to make you lose faith. cancer is horrible my aunt and one of my friends still battle it. and my teacher died of it two yrs ago... all in all good write. keep it up.
    ali
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is full of emotion and an angst. It makes your poem real and identifiable. Very well done.
    On a personal note, I don't believe God causes things to happen. I believe it is the Devils fault. But all in all pain is pain. No one can make up for suffering.
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I like this poem. I got the "losing faith" vibe from it. I understand the emotions behind this. Very good. I hope to read more of you poetry...


    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      i am so sorry..
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. I hope it didn't really happen. There's a lot of feeling in this, but the last line doesn't seem quite right. It's like you have a lot of emotion in the rest, but you just kind of blew it off in the last line. It's not how you realy feel or something. The rest is great, though. Keep up the good work.
    Byeyahs,
    ~Lizzy~
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]
      im sorry if that truly happend... good write
    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by Infected Mind | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i know i've felt like this before...like when my grandparents died and my best friend Justin V. passed away. but everything happens for a reason. it was her time to go, although it's hard to let go, it was for the best.

    good write.

    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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