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    dots Submission Name: Homelessdots

    Author: Lelian Marie
    ASL Info:    16, star, neverland
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 31/22/32
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 843
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       Its about a girl who walks home (after where ever she was) and usually takes the same route home and when she takes this route she usually stumbles across a homeless boy.

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    When i walk past that alleyway i
    usually stumble a homeless boy
    who sometimes will say

    Miss please help me
    please help me
    i don't know where to go
    and my family hates me
    miss can you help me
    i don't have a home please

    I'd give him 10 bucks, then say
    get something to eat but
    promise me you wont waste
    it on things you don't need


    He grins at me when he gives
    me a hug and says god bless
    your miss for showing me so
    much love i swear you were
    sent to me from god above

    Miss please help
    i really have no where to go
    i have no one to help me to know
    i am watched over in these streets
    o whoa
    i am watched over i am loved
    no matter what 'cuz you were
    sent to me from god above


    Miss please help me.

    Submitted on 2007-01-10 23:34:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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