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Restless Night (Midnight Blues)

Author: Dylan fan
ASL Info:    19/m/mi
Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 65 /47 /27
Words: 279
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Restless Night (Midnight Blues)

Gong! Midnights song sounds from the clock tower stead
Where on his pillow of rock the bum lays in bed
With hunger in his belly and lonesome blues in his head
Hard to sleep when you're told you're better off dead
A restless night just singin' the blues

Down a dusty dirt road a chimney smokes grey
The weeping widow sits by the window at bay
Shes longing for the stars and slowly fading away
Hard to sleep with memory of what was lost that day
A restless night just singin' the blues

In the 5th floor hospital window under white sheets of pain
A little bald headed girl prays in vain
A mothers puddle of tears; a father tired and drained
Hard to sleep when the time just wanes
A restless night just singin' the blues

Young boy sits with Holden Caulfield in one hand
He broadcasts with his razor that he can no longer stand
The guys at school who make that place a dreadful land
Hard to sleep when the morning is your entrant
A restless night just singin' the blues

Whiskey bar sign flashes on the streets downtown
The factory man sits with his head tilted down
Lost his job and couldn't bear his wife's helpless frown
Hard to sleep when hard times just won't drown
A restless night just singin' the blues

The writer sits on the deck under the cypress tree
He's left tossing in bed each night endlessly
Tormented by grim thoughts of a world not free
Hard to sleep when darkness is all you see
A restless life just singin' the blues

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  I really liked this. The first stanza was almost an exact for my poem Junkie, which you commented on:)

This line confused me a bit,

"At an old house worn old the chimney smokes grey"

You have old in there twice, and I don't think it works well...maybe just using one? Or maybe I'm just missing it...hmm...

Anywhoo, loved the write, and you win as my first favorite:)

| Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this a lot; reminded me very much of langston Hughes 'The Weary Blues.' Think you need to work on tightening it a bit. I think if you put this in blues tempo (which is 4/4 I believe, but don't quote me) it would really sing and the blues part would come through. Keep going with this; it's really good and can be truly excellent.
| Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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