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    dots Submission Name: The Crimedots

    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Crimedots

    Is it even possible to hear a word of sympathy from those crimson lips of yours?
    I’ve tumbled threw the heavens and am
    now at hells front door.
    Not sure where my comforts went,
    Had hoped at least you’d care.
    Yet you threw my problems to the ground,
    As if I wasn’t even there.

    I thought I had conquered my issues,
    Yet here I am again.
    Trying to keep a happy face, while
    starting just another game of lets pretend.
    With each every dying moment,
    I start my journey once more.
    With each critique and word of hate,
    I struggle towards that golden door.

    This time I just can not move on,
    You’ve taken way too much,
    You’ve committed the most beautiful crime,
    You made me fall in love.

    Submitted on 2007-01-11 12:56:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think this is an interesting poem that goes from one extreme to the other rather quickly and it would seem the person you had in mind means a lot to you
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by psycho love | [ Reply to This ]

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