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    dots Submission Name: Equal Partnersdots

    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       (Re-Named from "A Love Poem") Enjoy, please. I did have a lot on my mind. I hope you feel good after you're done reading this.

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    dotsEqual Partnersdots

    I watch the last strings of fate
    Twirl on an everlasting yarn,
    That stretches across the sky
    And weaves our souls together
    Like a heavenly sweater.

    Don't underestimate the power of the mind
    It creates these images,
    Powerful, unseemingly beautiful
    As lovers, we are subject to the unbelievable
    And our minds are joined as one.

    Oh! The unmitigated joy!
    We see the universe in all its splendor
    Holding hands, we can walk on water
    Imitating Gods and Demons
    Mocking our heavenly hosts.

    Our lives are connected
    No longer alone,
    We can see the stars and the moon and the sun
    Unfogged are we, from ignorance
    And devestation is a feeling of long ago.

    Such as we are,
    We are lovers.
    No longer solitary
    We are connected by the strings of fate.
    And We become one, together.

    Submitted on 2004-06-03 20:35:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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