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    dots Submission Name: that lookdots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 594
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 269

       i swear i didnt do it...

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    dotsthat lookdots

    yesterday i saw you,
    looking into space.
    yesterday i saw you,
    with that look upon your face.
    a look that kills like pioson.
    a stare piercing the night.
    you blinked, now they don't open.
    i closed them for you tight.

    Submitted on 2007-01-11 13:35:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's a little short, but hey someone died can't complain about that. You must have really not liked them.
    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by trenthippie | [ Reply to This ]

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