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    dots Submission Name: tell medots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 333
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 361
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1952



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       i wrote it for him... but he doesnt know yet...


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    dotstell medots
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    tell me that i dont have to cry
    tell me that i dont have to die
    tell me everything will be alright
    say that i no longer have to fight
    tell me its okay to feel this way
    tell me all the things i want to say
    tell me i no longer have to fear
    of losing you and drowning in this tear


    im crying in the shadows
    of my own soul
    i know it looks cold and dark there
    i know you can see this hole
    but can you see it filling
    with thoughts of you
    the new found memories
    of love thats true


    tell me that its okay to feel
    the way i do and that you're here for real
    tell me that you'll be by my side
    when i'm lost and trying not to hide
    tell me the truths i want ot hear
    tell me so the darkness will be clear
    tell me i can trust you with my heart
    because i think you've had it from the start


    im crying in the shadows
    of my own soul
    i know it looks cold and dark there
    i know you can this hole
    but can you see it filling
    with thoughts of you
    the new found memories
    of love thats true


    i'll tell you anything you want to know
    i'll tell you all the truths so you wont go
    i'll tell you all the secrets that i hide
    i'll tell you all the times i failed to try
    i'll tell you so you can feel all right
    about the times you stay up late at night
    i'll tell you anything so you're okay
    about the things that happened yesterday


    im crying in the shadows
    of my own soul
    i know it looks cold and dark there
    i know you can see this hole
    but can you see it filling
    with thoughts of you
    the new found memories
    of love thats true




    Submitted on 2007-01-11 13:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It kind of seems like you want to open up so much on the inside, but are holding back. A very loving yet dark poem at the same time. It's very clever. Nice job!
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]


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