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    dots Submission Name: The Liedots

    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just found out i'm pregnant, and this is what i jotted down after the discovery

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    dotsThe Liedots

    Hidden in the way
    Your eyes penetrate my soul
    Lurking in the undertones
    of you lingering touch
    Is the reason...

    The secret i keep forever untold
    Is a weakness that slowly eats
    At a love, forever more

    Does it show in my eyes
    As the buds are blooming all around me
    Life is begining for all
    As a child is forced into adulthood

    Yet up the long road against the horizon
    A man is standing, an angelic glow becomes him
    With each step and echo for a memory
    Life approaches its reason

    Incmplete and yet completely ignorant
    A woman finds her reason
    Reason for living the piece that was missing
    In a lie, a gift, a child.

    Its apprent in the way
    Your eyes caress me
    Pulsing from your voice
    The reason I love him so

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