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    dots Submission Name: The Childdots

    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 563
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 562

       About a murdered child, but not quite in the way you would imagine

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    dotsThe Childdots

    Pulsating through the night
    Screaming in your face
    For just a breif moment
    Is the love you never grasped

    Blooming all around you
    Lying at your feet
    Crying in the darkness
    Is the Child you murdered

    Have you ever felt the tears
    Or realized you were her greatest fear
    And her only true love?
    You were the one she admired

    These hidden secrets, the hostility
    All the confusion surronding him
    Is becoming the only source
    For her to survive

    Submitted on 2007-01-12 09:11:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the poem had good rythmn
    expect for here.

    Is the Child you murdered

    Have you ever felt the tears
    Or realized you were her greatest feat
    And her only true love?
    You were the one she admired

    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Bloomsbury Set | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very creative piece
    keep up the good work, i hope to read more
    of your enchanting verse

    always a pleasure to meet new people

    take care

    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by huntingjonathon | [ Reply to This ]
      My goodness! This has got to be one of the best poems I've read on this site so far. What was your inspiration for this powerful art? To me it seems to be about a lost love. A very painful break-up, or a relationship about to end. What ever the motivation, great job! Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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