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    dots Submission Name: The Fortune Tolddots
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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Fortune Tolddots
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    The stains; the lead
    the broken vessels
    and fine lines: no ending
    or beginning
    How do you read a story?
    In the structureless web
    turned up, soft or callused
    Lying defenseless
    Tell me my fortune




    Submitted on 2007-01-12 16:46:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is rad. Excellent job! I really like this poem. It is very well thought out and written. You did a wonderful job. I am ussually not a fan of short poems, but this one is great. I don't have any suggestions, becuase I feel that it is fine how it is. Great work!

    Keep up the awesome writing.

    peace.
    -Kamerin
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]


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