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    dots Submission Name: Breathtakingdots
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    Author: red passion
    ASL Info:    15/m/Lost in my mind(KY)
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 117/291/81
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 866
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    dotsBreathtakingdots
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    With each kiss
    that you give me
    I can't help but to love you
    and forever be lost in your eyes

    What I see when this happens
    is alot of pain, alot of sorow
    and it's hurting you so much,
    you can hardly stand it anymore

    So I'm still waiting
    for you to grab my hand
    for you to steal my breath
    for you to hold my heart




    Submitted on 2007-01-12 23:04:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      there is nothing i can say about this poem that you havent already said in writing it. this is a good piece and yet another piece of yours that is going on my favorites list.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      thats sweet,i love the part when said

    ''With each kiss
    that you give me
    I can't help but to love you
    and forever be lost in your eyes''



    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by vlarrimore | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet.
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Czarina Words | [ Reply to This ]


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