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Breathtaking


Author: red passion
ASL Info:    15/m/Lost in my mind(KY)
Elite Ratio:    8 - 117 /291 /81
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Description:

TO HER, NO OTHER DESCRIPTION NEEDED


Breathtaking


With each kiss
that you give me
I can't help but to love you
and forever be lost in your eyes

What I see when this happens
is alot of pain, alot of sorow
and it's hurting you so much,
you can hardly stand it anymore

So I'm still waiting
for you to grab my hand
for you to steal my breath
for you to hold my heart




Submitted on 2007-01-12 23:04:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  there is nothing i can say about this poem that you havent already said in writing it. this is a good piece and yet another piece of yours that is going on my favorites list.
| Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
  thats sweet,i love the part when said

''With each kiss
that you give me
I can't help but to love you
and forever be lost in your eyes''



| Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by vlarrimore | [ Reply to This ]
  sweet.
| Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Czarina Words | [ Reply to This ]


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