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    dots Submission Name: Sitting Here Waitingdots
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    Author: TwistedMinded
    ASL Info:    23/m/San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 82/109/32
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1030
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 544



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    dotsSitting Here Waitingdots
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    Man
    I sit here waiting for my death,
    finally im going to rest.
    Worse thing of dying is knowing,
    and worse thing of knowing is waiting.
    One day feels like a thousand years,
    so imagine what two days feels like.
    As the devil cheers on, one more victory
    for that mathafucker, but life goes on,
    right?,
    Shit-
    I literally live
    one day at a time,
    like there’s no tomorrow.
    Never thought I would say this
    but I can't wait to die.




    Submitted on 2007-01-12 23:56:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This, out of everthing I've read from you is not half bad...and that is saying a lot for what I have seen.

    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. you are a really great writer. i like to read your stuff. i can really relate to it. i feel like i cant wait to die. somedays i want to die more than other days, but i always feel like i cant wait to die! keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]
      cool poem. i just keep wondering when i die will my soul be at peace.
    thats the idea lingering in the back of my head unmoved.

    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      you have a wonderful way with words. this was short, but very good. KEEP IT UP!! IM IMPRESSED!!
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      omgosh! that is soooo sad! but good words!
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      dude
    sad!!!
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      so im guessing 2 days must feel like 2 thousand years...maybe? kinda?
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, as far as it goes, you should probably think abou syntax and spelling. change ass to as. add period at end of last line instead of comma.
    and last get rude of the comma after 'right?'

    the best part of the poem was the break '[censored]-'
    it slows the rant down so that it goes with the part about a day seeming like it last a thousand.

    have fun.
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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