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    dots Submission Name: Alwaysdots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1064
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 607



    Description:
       I wrote this about someone that is still dear to my heart and i wish that me and him will always be frriends. This poem is not without emotion but it is ment to be a light sweet poem. I hope that you like it


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    dotsAlwaysdots
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    I have nothing to do but wait for you,
    And patiently I shall.
    For I am falling in love with you,
    And for that I am glad.
    For you are sweet and kind to me.
    You don't take things to far,
    And even though I may be strange
    You will be there if I fall.
    You understand just who I am
    And who I want to be.
    Without you I am all alone,
    So please don't ever leave.
    And even though you are a dork,
    I still think of you the same.
    As a sweet handsome drummer
    That I want to be my man.




    Submitted on 2007-01-13 01:25:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hope things work out for you.
    i love the begining, the intro to it all.
    this peice shows that you really do like this guy. theres really not much i can say about this one though....sorry.
    but like i said, hope things work out for you.

    -aaron
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i realy like this you know youve written a good poem if people can relate to what youve written... adn from the comments people have given you and from my own experence your poem is verry good... I feel like this for my friend... keep up the work and i hope thing work out good for you...

    come check out my stuff sometime...
    amanda
    aka Candy
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
      aaww...this is really sweet. i really like it. i think of my friend ashley the same way. i am completely falling for her and she knows it...but she just wants to be friends because of a bad relationship she had not too long ago. i hope he gets to read this...he will more than likely love it. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      your poem is more of a thats cute poem.its simple but yet you can understand it and relate,like the part where you said

    ''without you i am so alone''

    because when youre with someone its hard to detach yourself.and once youre apart it feels like the world done crashed and burned.its cool.
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by vlarrimore | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cute.
    like you said, it is simple and what not.
    but i really don't get whether you're trying to rhyme or not?
    i think you could have picked a better title.
    but i think this is simple as simple gets and if anyone gets lower than this,
    that's ridiculous.
    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      hope he likes this lover girl:)
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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