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    dots Submission Name: the other girl....dots

    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 599
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       This is about a guy i fell in love with but he has a girlfriend. The guilt got to me so I told him it is over.

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    dotsthe other girl....dots

    I dont wanna cry over something
    that can never be
    I have to let go of you
    and you need to let go of me

    Your kiss, your touch, your love
    just feels so right
    but how can it be
    if you only come and go at night

    You feel so good to me
    but you are not mine
    I want you more than anything
    but I can not change time

    so dont kiss me in the shadows
    my heart needs the honest light
    what we are doing is wrong
    and I need to make it right

    I will let you go now
    like so many before
    in hopes that one day I will find an open window ... instead of a locked door

    Submitted on 2007-01-13 01:53:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very good! I love the way you told the story in poetry and rhyme! Love! It's either right or its "not quite right", but golly, it sure makes the world go round!
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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