Personally, I thought you maintained a weighty theme with 'Hold me until the Sun turns Black' - Although not an eternal statement, the longevity of the comment is guesswork for most people using their imagination, which is required to appreciate the messaging in the poem.
Great to read a poem that didn't turn into a rant on doom and gloom.
We have the choice of looking at our lot in life as a half-full or half-empty situation. I, too, prefer to see the half-full side, and your optimism shines in this lovely poem. "And for every dark and hopeless night the light of mercy flows" is an excellent reminder that hope and hopeless are only four small letters apart. Sharon :-)
Hey. When I first started reading, I thought: Oh good. It's another poem to give hope...But I wonder how it ends....... The reason I thought this was because in poems like this, the ending (or random parts of it) are often the same or similar to someone elses, or the rhyming words are predictable, and even in some cases the whole thing is predictable. It's hard to come up with your own words of hope, and say them in an original way. (I hope nobody takes this the wrong way, because even my poems are far too novice for me to complain, not to mention the fact that they are probably more predictable than others.) But anyway, the point in blabbing to You about this was actually to commend you for your ending. (And the whole poem in general.) I loved it. The structure was different, the flow was great, the words/wording was organized and thought out... It was just really good over all.
Most of all though, I loved the ending. While it still showed the hope displayed throughout the whole poem, it also brought in emotion (the emotion that these kinds of poems are usually lacking in). The last stanza made me relive some of my own sadness, and thought about hope and losing hope, from losing a loved one.
Anyway, I could blab much longer, but I'm afraid I have already bored you with this. Point to this whole thing is, I loved it, and it's going in my favourites. Thanks for the read. I hope to see lots more from you :)
Ever the optimist i see. I dont know i used to share your sentiments and then i lost that hope. Slowly i'm earning it back. Hopefully i will be back there soon and i can have hope even in the dimmest sitution.