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Go away be gone shoo

Author: sravenlyn
ASL Info:    17/f/NJ
Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21 /58 /67
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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to an x bf that hurt me enuff to survive

Go away be gone shoo

Why do you still call me?
Its not that hard to see
That I dont want to talk to you
Go away, be gone, shoo
Should I still care after all the shit?
Should I listen to what you have to spit
Im tired of your mind games and lies
Your more annoying then flys
Dissapear forever
I wish you were that clever
You left me alone to ponder in sorrow
To be filled in wonder of tomarrow
You promised to many things
You purposed and gave me a ring
But you when you left things got clear
And the only thing that fell was a tear
I staied strong instead of falling down
I staied in the air not on the ground

Submitted on 2007-01-13 18:13:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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   I thought that this was ok...somethimes it's hard to write about anger and sadness....
you had some grammar problems in here, so I would double check...the guy sounds like a serious jerk.

| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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