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A Fucked Up Life


Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 156
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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contains lyrics from Limp Bizkit, which i very briefly heard in one of their songs and clung to.
enjoy reading. - Phoenix


A Fucked Up Life



Everybody knows it
Nobody shows it
The truth is ever surreal
Life is how you feel
Doesn't matter how you look
We all end up in the same book
Same volume, same chapter
You can't hear above my laughter
Fucked up world has a fucked up life
Fucked up girl with a fucked up knife
I'm the outsider, break me
I'm the insulted, shake me
Fucked up knife is blood tipped
Fucked up girl's heart is torn and ripped
Evil stems and grows
Can't feel the blows
Tears sting
Hate everything
Can't run away
Don't have strength to face the day
Can't find a way out
Beginning to doubt
No more innocence, no more life
No more hate and no more strife
Soon to be gone and no more
Simply watch as I fall to the floor
All alone and by myself
Feel like I've been shoved away on a shelf
I feel so cold.




Submitted on 2007-01-13 22:56:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is an amazing piece of writing. It is one of the most real, deep, raw poetic writings that I have read from pretty much anyone on this site. Excellent job. This is very good. The type of writing which expresses one's deepest emotions from the depths of their heart, always turns out well. This is an excellent piece. Great job.

Keep up the great writing.
-Kamerin
| Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]


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