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You Will Regret

Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Betrayal
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point blank, i got used by someone that i once thought was my friend. these are my straight-up feelings about the situation. i dont know whether its true. but i dont care.
enjoy. - Phoenix

You Will Regret

How can you betray me
Just as if I never knew
And how could you just choose to leave
After all that I've done for you?
You're a fool as well as a traitor
You might not be away very long
But you will heavily regret your decision later
And by that time, I'll be gone.

Submitted on 2007-01-13 23:13:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very nice, short and sweet. It is a true thing, life has become a circle of using and being used. You were very clear, and had a good flow. Unfortunately, we cannot always predict or choose the best of friends. Good job, it's a very true thing to life.

Overall, you were to the point and very clear. You had the flow and a good choice of words. Congratulations on a good write.
| Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]

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