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    dots Submission Name: Prayerdots
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    Author: TwistedMinded
    ASL Info:    23/m/San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 82/109/32
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 977
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 531



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    A prayer is useless, used by the pity;
    a prayer is hopeless, so know this,
    a call for help, begging for mercy,
    prayer is communication thru the mind,
    but how? Can you turn back the time.
    A prayer is a wish, a dream,
    a 'want not a 'need,
    a prayer is a make-believe, a deceive,
    something that will make you feel better,
    something to rely on when you fuck up,
    some kind of escape-goat,
    so next time you pray,
    think about what you pray for.




    Submitted on 2007-01-13 23:28:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interesting... makes you think about you're prayers and just what they mean to you... and are they simply that "prayers" ... nevertheless great job here... gets your readers thinking.. ;-) nothing wrong in that :)

    ~*jackie*~
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      i pray.
    when the power goes off during my favorite show :P
    no serioiusly hun don't be so negative.
    nice write though i like this one.
    not my cup of tea, but it's still very good.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting perspective.... good writing!
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      Certainly some food for thought here. Very well thought out, and put together.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      totally diss agree with yr theory but you can write well.
    peace!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      good writing
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by social circus | [ Reply to This ]
      hey kiddo,
    spell check, it takes away from the meaning when ya leave it like that. theme hits home with almost every one one time or another. we all sometimes feel the inadequacy of prayer, the limit to it. your rhymes were pretty nice to. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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