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    dots Submission Name: Maybe..dots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       um..another old one i wrote


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    dotsMaybe..dots
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    Maybe things will go away in time...
    Maybe I won’t cry every time my head hits the pillow,
    I’ll wake up smiling and go to sleep with a smile,
    I’ll always be in a good mood,
    And know that no matter what,
    Things are always going to be good
    But right now,
    I seem to be unable to find the sunrise by the shore
    The worlds moving all around me
    And I’m staying in one place
    My questions are running in circles
    Never seeming to find answers…
    I just want to know everything’s going to be okay…






    Submitted on 2007-01-13 23:45:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, kimmy this is T.Redd
    Just want to tell you I,m here for you!
    If you just want to vent, even though you claim
    it's in old poem, it doesn't matter, i have open
    ears whenever.
    I don't know what kind of head games this guy
    is playing with you. Ask yourself is it worth all the trouble.

    Your submissions seems more like random
    thoughts, which is fine.

    I suggest you try to explore more with Poetry forms.


    Anyway, peace, love, and keep writing.

    T.Redd
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by T.Redd | [ Reply to This ]


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