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    dots Submission Name: Running Awaydots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRunning Awaydots
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    My Hurt and confusion is following me
    Itís my shadow everywhere
    No where to hide
    And no where to run
    I canít get away as hard as I tryÖ
    Please just donít ask why I cry
    Every time I think about it
    More tears seem to fall
    Let me figure things out on my own
    Hopefully things will be better
    But for now,
    Let me do it on my own




    Submitted on 2007-01-13 23:47:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a good piece i like it alot, honestly it kind of sounds like something i would write, i see we think alot alike. i get the point being presented, youre trying to deal with a shadow that lerks near, you dont need anyones help, you're trying to make it on your own showing independence. i liked these lines:

    "Please just donít ask why I cry
    Every time I think about it
    More tears seem to fall"

    it describes me in many ways. batteling with depression isnt much fun. over all you didi great though. thanks for the read! keep writing! :)

    ~Cris
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]


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