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    dots Submission Name: addictiondots
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    Author: social circus
    ASL Info:    16/M/LA
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 17/57/36
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 641
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 772



    Description:
       im clean now accept for weed but thats how drug addiction felt for me back then.please leave a comment on what you think.


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    dotsaddictiondots
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    im a drug addict
    you name it, i lived it
    long nights feeling cold
    this pain and needle cant get old
    out on the streets, bad acid trip
    killing for money, save the last hit
    living a life of fear and shame
    noone else but me to blame
    i wonder how i will die
    will i be high and then fall from the sky
    noone matters but everyone cares
    feeling like its not fair
    loseing friends and losing love
    dont even have enemys to shove
    life is gone for me life is at its end
    im so gone i dont have a goodbye to send
    crying on the phone telling my mom
    see if there is such thing as a addict.com
    im feeling so numb
    here it goes the demons have come.




    Submitted on 2007-01-14 00:45:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. this is intense. The most i've ever done is shrooms and weed, and i almost died from laced weed so i can't even image what the rest of it's like. I have friends though that have gotten into that [censored]. One's so far gone he might as well be dead, the other, she checked herself into rehab after two weeks of heroin and has been clean ever since, so i'm not completely lost on this subject...

    But anywhoo, about your poem. It was great. The only thing I'd fix is in a few places you left out commas where there need to be some. Just re-read it and you'll see where the natural pauses are, where commas should go.

    Good luck with sobriety:)

    Sam
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent stuff from you. Self realisation is always the first step towards making things right.

    I wish you well.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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