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    dots Submission Name: Thirst - Updateddots
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    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 733
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 929



    Description:
       Ello,

    This was a spur of the moment poem. It came to me at 130 at night. I was feeling somewhat: mad, jelous, depressed, stressed etc. I'm in love with it , and I'd love to get your thoughts on it

    P.S I didn't draw the pic. I found it of the internet (http://www.diggerhistory2.info/images/army/1942/thirst.jpg)


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    dotsThirst - Updateddots
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    Kill me now, nice and slow

    Feel the last life, leave my soul

    Rip out my heart, with your bare hands

    Let the blood pour between your fingers,

    Watch my eyes gloss over, feel the joy within

    Let the feeling of triumph flush away the truth

    The metallic taste, fills your mouth

    Giant gashes along my body, where you once caressed

    The animal comes to the surface, and instincts rule your soul

    Ignore my last memories, my last love

    Your tenderness ravishes the world

    Well I see the true beast, the last thing on my eyes

    Pale and tortured, I lay before you

    No beauty was ever there, and will never be there

    The mastery behind your work, a chance at true art

    Your final masterpiece, untill the next thirst




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      This to me portrayed the wanna be romance of a vampire groupie with a vampire. Like, she wanted to be his, or he wanted to be hers, for so long, only to die by this person the so call love?

    Very tragic...
    Sam
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Of ocurse you knwo what I have to say. Very deep and powerful. A very moving poem. You spoke words of yoru soul and pourd yoru feelings on to paper. On of the best ways to coup with anything, is to just write. And that is what you did here.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      really cool. really like it. very nice.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by esterhzys | [ Reply to This ]
      Deep and very powerful, and expertly crafted.

    Very well done indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      deep as deep gets, you speak of the soul but do you know it?
    nice write though in a animalistic sorta way.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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