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    dots Submission Name: Is There Any Treasure Inside ?dots

    Author: Parul garg
    ASL Info:    26/f/earth
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 241/100/30
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
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       minds of fanatics... orthodox... bigoted people who are trying to devastate the world at their minor or major levels... their perversions ...etc.

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    dotsIs There Any Treasure Inside ?dots

    He has put so many locks
    On his heart and his soul...
    Is there any treasure inside?
    Or is it the vacuity
    He unsuccessfully tries to hide?
    Impeccable vacuity...
    Incorrigible emptiness...
    Nothing left to be construed
    Nothing left to be dismantled
    No secret worth looking for...
    Perhaps that explains
    Embellishment with locks.

    (After a long effort I have decoded this hideous truth)

    His mind is actually a dark vault
    Where only a few voices
    Rage and echo restlessly
    All emanating from a vial of poison
    Poison, that he distilled from
    His insatiable lust for power.
    So occupied he is in spreading
    His rabid and fascist ideologies
    He doesn't have a clue that
    His own feet are precariuosly poised
    On the verge of a seething volcanic crater.

    P.S. Despite God's omnipresence
    Our Lord never resides in a place
    Where somebody tries to lock Him in.

    Submitted on 2007-01-14 06:48:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Outstanding! A delightful poem with a philosophical message! You have done well with both! Your verse is both intuitive and brilliant in structure and message!
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      You have done well to describe the worst of despots and your analysis of his funtioning is frighteningly apt. In is a real mind bender when one sets out to break down the workings of such a criminally sick mind.

    May I never have the occasion to meet up with such a beast.
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i absolutely LOVE this poem. you have such a large vocabulary, i feel smart just reading it. wonderful piece. i like that you tied God into it in the end. loved it.

    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a great write this is. Perfect flow, all the way through.

    I am impressed !

    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      um whats that word i'm looking for, ah there it is
    WHOA!!!!!!!!! nice work
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Dispair | [ Reply to This ]

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